考研图画作文如何写好第一段?

英文悦读 2021-02-24 11:20

考研图画作文中第一段往往是整篇作文中最重要的部分,因为在极为有限的阅卷时间内,阅卷者往往会根据第一段的质量来确定整篇作文的档次。同时,图画作文的第一段需要考生自己描绘图片内容,也基本没有固定的模板可以照搬,这也能看出一名考生的真实水平。


一般来说,图画作文第一段可以分为两个固定部分:图片描述加总结。图片描述一般是一到两句话,总结一般是一句话。对于图片描述部分,一个比较好的方法是合并短句,即通过分词、从句、介词或形容词词组等形式将若干简单句整合为长句,这样不仅能使句与句之间的联系更加紧密,而且还能增强整篇文章的逻辑性和连贯性。


比如下面这道题目:



我们可以先用几个简单句来描述这幅漫画:


(1) The size of the goalkeeper is exaggerated in the striker’s mind.

(2) The striker thinks that he is unable to score a goal.

(3) The goalkeeper considers himself too small.

(4) The goalkeeper thinks he cannot catch the ball.


接下来我们需要将这几个简单句整合为一个复合句。先确定最核心的成分,写出主句:


As is shown in the cartoon, the goalkeeper's size is exaggerated in the mind of the striker.


再根据逻辑关系将第二句接上:


As is shown in the cartoon, the goalkeeper's size is exaggerated in the mind of the striker, making him think that he is unable to score a goal.


接下来再使用连接词while连接第三句和第四句(使用while可以对两者进行对比),同时使用too…to…结构将第三和第四句合并为一个句子:


As is shown in the cartoon, the goalkeeper's size is exaggerated in the mind of the striker, making him think that he is unable to score a goal, while the goalkeeper considers himself too small to catch the ball.


最后再加上一句总结,完成第一段:


As is shown in the cartoon, the goalkeeper's size is exaggerated in the mind of the striker, making him think that he is unable to score a goal, while the goalkeeper considers himself too small to catch the ball. The cartoonist is obviously trying to show the importance of self-confidence.


再举个例子:



我们同样可以用几个短句描述:


(1) A father is sitting on the ground.

(2) He is surrounded by his three sons and one daughter.

(3) They guard the net like a goalkeeper.

(4) They kick him back and forth like a football.


根据相同的方法将这些短句合并:


As is shown in the cartoon, a father is sitting on the ground, surrounded by his three sons and one daughter, who guard the net like a goalkeeper and kick him back and forth like a football.


最后再加上其他的修饰成分,比如可以用elderly来修饰父亲,用forlornly来形容父亲孤零零地坐在地上的状态,同时对句子进行微调:like a goalkeeper与like a football用法有点重复,可以考虑将like a football改为as if he were a football,然后再加上一句总结,最后得到的段落是:


As is shown in the cartoon, an elderly father is sitting forlornly on the ground, surrounded by his three sons and one daughter, who guard the net like a goalkeeper and kick him back and forth as if he were a football. The cartoonist is obviously trying to show the importance of filial piety.


具体来讲,考研写作中常见的短句合并方法主要有以下几种:


(1)使用介词短语


当两个或两个以上的短句在意思上有主从关系时,我们可以将有从属关系的句子改为介词短语,比如:


(a) The company produces affordable cars.

(b) The company supplies the region with state-of-the-art digital products.


我们可以将句子合并为:


Besides/Apart from producing affordable cars, the company also supplies the region with state-of-the-art digital products.


(2)使用定语从句


如果几个短句之间有逻辑关系,使用定语从句也是句子连接的一个常用方法,比如上面图画作文的三个句子:


(a) He is surrounded by his three sons and one daughter.

(b) They guard the net like a goalkeeper.

(c) They kick him back and forth like a football.


这三个短句可以改写为一个定语从句:


He is surrounded by his three sons and one daughter, who guard the net like a goalkeeper and kick him back and forth like a football.


(3)分词短语


我们可以用分词短语将短句变为主句的状语或定语,比如:


(a) I spent two hours on the internet yesterday.

(b) I tried to find a shirt that suited me.


合并后是:


I spent two hours on the internet yesterday, trying to find a shirt that suited me.


(4)名词性从句、不定式短语以及动名词


使用名词性从句、不定式短语以及动名词也可以对短句进行合并,例如:


(a) The dog howled and whined all night long. 

(b) The dog kept the whole neighborhood awake.


我们可以将第一句改为名词形式:the dog’s howling and whining all night long,合并后的句子即:


The dog's howling and whining all night long kept the whole neighborhood awake.


以上就是短句合并的一些基本方法,各位同学可以找一些图画作文练一下手,先写短句,然后尝试将它们整合为长句。如果能够练上10篇以上,以后遇到图画作文写起来也会比较顺手。在这个过程中也要注意基本的语法问题,减少不必要的错误。




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